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In many countries, there is a shortage of housing due to growing population. Some people argue that new towns should be built in the countryside, others argue for the regeneration of cities. What are the advantages and disadvantages of building new towns in the country side?

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It is not surprising that many cities are now expanding to the rural areas
due to
 of surging population. I would argue that it is not a welcome trend compared with
renovation
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 of the urban communities. One problem of building new towns in the
countryside
 could pose a huge threat to the yield of crops. Most of
lands
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 in the
countryside
 are for agricultural purposes and all governments all over the world are enacting different regulations to protect farmlands.
Nevertheless
, constructing new towns means that areas which were previously for crops and vegetables need to make room for houses and buildings to be converted to living compounds which could be detrimental to the productivity of
own
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staple foods like cereals and rice. new house in the
countryside
 farmland could be occupied staple foods essential in food shortage new house in the
countryside
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 increasing amount of garbage pose a huge threat or pressure to the
envionment
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environment
 new house in the
countryside
 traffic congestion during rush hours will be improved the quality of living will be enhanced
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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