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Some people believe that living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory has many advantages while others say that it has many disadvantages. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of living in an apartment instead of a university dormitory.

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One of the social concerns today relates to which accommodations should
students
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 choose when they enter
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universities.
While
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 it is often argued that living in an
apartment
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 is always the best choice, others believe that
university
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a university
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dormitory
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 is better. In my opinion, I would rather choose
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apartment
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an apartment
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instead
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 of
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dormitory
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the dormitory
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. On the one hand, living in an
apartment
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 gives
people
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 more space and freedom environment.
This
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 means that
people
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 can do whatever they want when they rent an
apartment
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.
Students
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 can decorate their
room
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rooms
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, watch movies, stay up late without
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other
people
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, etc.
In addition
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, none of
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the student
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student
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students
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 wants to have any complex troubles with their roommates and renting an
apartment
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 is the best way to avoid
this
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 problem. It is
also
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 possible to say that not all roommates are polite and they are not able to live peacefully with the others.
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,
according to
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students
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 have to move away from
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the dormitory
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dormitory
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dormitories
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 because they have some arguments or they cannot stand the way their roommates live.
On the other hand
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, living in an
apartment
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 can
has
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 some economical drawbacks. Some
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students
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the students
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 have allowances from their parents so it may not be a big deal for them.
However
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, not all
people
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 have enough money to live in an
apartment
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. Normally, university
students
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 have to find a part-time job to pay for the rent bills and other expenses. It may be
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 for
people
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 because they have to balance
between
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study and work.
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, many
students
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 often complain that they don't have enough time to study when they
offered
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are offered
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 a part-time job. In conclusion, both views have their own benefits and drawbacks. In my viewpoint,
students
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 should choose to live in an
apartment
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 if they have
high
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a high
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 economy or
able
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are able
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 to arrange their time because it will bring them more benefits than living in
university
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a university
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dormitory
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