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Nowadays, more and more people decide to have children later in their life. Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages

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Children are important to fulfil the meaning of marriage life in everyone's view.In
this
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 modern society,people are thinking that getting a
baby
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 later will be good but it has some other health complications for both men and
women
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.Let us discuss it.
To begin
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 with,Some community thinks that having a
baby
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 in their early marriage will be a burden and they decided to postpone it for some years.
Due to
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 the fact that both men and
women
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 are working in
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 century.
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, everyone running behind in money and materialistic prosperity only.When they make a decision to get a
baby
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 later they need to face fertility complications in both genders.As per the doctor's ,advice
women
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 should have a
baby
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 between the ages of 24 to 28.
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this
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 age
women
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 are facing abdomen-related issues like PCOD
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 un unhealthy lifestyles.
Secondly
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, a Good
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 rate is
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 considered in the
country
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's development and having a
baby
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 later will
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 affect the
country
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's improvement
as well as
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 the
population
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 in a great manner.Recent research has stated that the
population
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 of the
country
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 has reduced by 20% in
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 21st century.,
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 children are the future pillars of the Nation's economy but the birth rate of babies has been reduced to half.
In addition
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 ,Men and
women
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 will be criticised by the surrounding people because of their decision to have a child later in their life which will make them mentally unstable.
To sum up
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,every citizen must know the importance of a
country
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's
population
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 and growth.The authorities must provide awareness programmes about getting a child later and its impact on normal life and
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 health complication.,
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 in my ,opinion getting a
baby
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 later will have more disadvantages which overweigh the advantages.The Government should consider
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 issue important.,
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However
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 steps can be taken to alleviate
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 situation.
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