Some people believe that children should be banned from using their phones during the school day. Others believe that children should be allowed to use their phones. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Children
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are the gist of life, and as parents, we need to consider and discuss whether phones are friends or foes to our
children
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. Each age group differs dramatically in it
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and desires and so on.
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to obtain smart devices during the day, and why some families forbid it unnecessarily. Undoubtedly
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nowdays
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are growing up with technology in their hands, they
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born with it. If parents took that away it will create a negative impact on them later on,
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might try to compare themselves to others, or they would not have familiarity
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these devices which may or may not make them feel less of their lives later on in the future. The downside is, they may become slacks and introverted and I think
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what most parents believe in, by banning them from using their phones during school days they might be more active or even smarter,
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,
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is not the case. Sometimes the child needs help with difficult homework
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, what would he do? It is a massive effort to find a piece of information without using the internet to help,
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is the same as going to libraries back in the day. In my personal perspective,
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must have a decent length of time to
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their phones and practice technology on a daily basis, I see that most
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with a moderated
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of the internet are more getting intelligent and confident.
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, technology seized the world at present, and
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are coming more and more into it, taking that away from them is a huge mistake, a better alternative to
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letting them
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it with daily screen time.
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  • Educational resources
  • Social development
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  • Screen time
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