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Online shopping is replacing the shopping in stores. Do you think it is positive or negative?

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As The population is increasing rapidly over the past few decades which opened doors for many industries to rise and online shopping is by far the top among them. Eventually,it became
habit
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 for
people
 to buy anything online rather than drop by the stores.
Although
this
 phenomenon has its advantages and disadvantages looking at the present trend I feel the positives outweigh the negatives.
Firstly
, the biggest game changer for online shopping is both
time
 and energy saving. One can directly go to their liked website and search for the products they need and select all the subcategories for that specific
product
 and place the order. Companies
also
 provide return policies so that even if the consumer is not satisfied with the item they can simply return it with just one click.
In addition
 to
this
 online shopping provides extra addons like offers all around the year, different variety of models which may not be available in stores and most importantly without worrying about
time
 one can place the order any
time
 of the day. Online shopping needs a website which means it needs more
people
 to work on the backend not just for building and maintaining the online tool but
also
 need huge warehouses to store their items and
people
 to do all the errands for the consumers like delivery and customer support, so we will have more employment opportunities.
Besides
 all these major advantages there are a few disadvantages which
people
 usually talk about. Some
people
 like to shop physically like they want to touch the
product
 verify it with their own eyes do trial and error on the
product
 if it is applicable, even after all these tests they don't feel like buying and they come back later. The other negative is the
time
 which order takes for delivery
although
this
 is the most alleviate factor still there are few occasions where the
product
 gets delayed and even damaged.
To conclude
 my overview of
this
 question online shopping has many positives to note
on the other hand
 there are a minimal amount of negatives but ,
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this
 will not outweigh the positive impacts it has.
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