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The maps below show changed in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make a comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show changed in the city of Nelson in recent times. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make a comparisons where relevant.
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The presented maps illustrate
us
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apply
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the changes in present times in Nelson City. From an
overall
 perspective, it's clear that
,
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 the city experienced enough changes in recent times, and the layout from 2000 to today changed to
contemporary
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a contemporary
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version
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versions
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,
such
 as new residential areas, and some zones for people's goods,
as well as
 contribute for people's society.
To begin
 with, the train station brush up to the modern version,
as well as
 the old market zones improved to the newest one.
In addition
main
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the main
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 change from the map is
road
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the road
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 changed to
the
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a
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 pedestrian way for only
the
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apply
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individuals.
On the other hand
, there are new changes are, in
city
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the city
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center
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centre
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 added
new
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a new
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 bike rental scheme
in
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apply
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today's
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today
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,
as well as
 half of
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the residence
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residence
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residences
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 and the new huge shopping
center
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centre
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opened
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opening
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 to
side
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a side
the side
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 of
University
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the University
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.
In addition
, restaurants bars and clubs open it in front of the port for
spectacular
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a spectacular
the spectacular
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 view.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "as well as, in addition".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • modifications
  • upgrades
  • facilities
  • commercial areas
  • residential zones
  • green spaces
  • recreational facilities
  • industrial areas
  • environmental conservation
  • eco-friendly
  • pollution control
  • distinct difference
  • notable change
  • expansion
  • decline
  • transformation
  • enhancement
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