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Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living . What is your opinion about this? What other times in history would be interesting to live in?

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Some people believe that
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time
in
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the
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mankind to live. I stand with
this
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,
this
 era is the best to cherish with the inclusion of technological advancements and financial liberty. I will shed some light on the same in the upcoming paragraphs.
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the medieval
time
 in history to cherish. On the first hand, with the ease of living
due to
 improvise in technology is having a tight grip in today’s world. Provided that, cell phones are the best invention to connect with individuals and share
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 good amount of memories together. But, in the past during the period of 1800-1900, humans needed to write a letter to
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 beloved ones and
similarly
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 a response and which took more than 10 days to receive. Even if, financial liberty is quite a boom in today’s
time
.
Persons
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feels
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 relaxed with the money they are spending and saving for the future. We can have anything
such
 as clothes,
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 to add joy
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 our lifestyle.
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, technology and financial liberty are the joysticks of
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mankind.
On the other hand
, I believe the period of Rama was the best
time
 to inhale the air of democracy and witnessed the events
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 there. Because of his simplicity, unbiasedness and
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love, mankind
were
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 happy and lived a great life under his rule. I am captivated by reading the journals about him, his policies, and the ways how he helped the people in their tough situations – a fight between the lords and the rakshasa or how Sita was dragged and captured in Sri Lanka for many years? To summarise, there are many different phases in human history from Treta Yuga to today’s
time
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it is creating an online world,
currency
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and currency
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 with the help of powerful technology.
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