Some people say the government should not put money into building theaters and sports stadiums, they should spend more money on medical care and education. To what extent do you agree or disagree this opinion?

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some people, investments made by the government into building sports venues are wasted. From their point of view, public funds should be put into medical care and education. In

this

essay, I want to summarize the main points of

this

thesis and share my opinion about it.

First,

government money comes from taxpayers.

Thus

, it should be spent to directly improve their lives and meet their needs. Stadiums and theatres may require a huge amount of money to be completed.

As a consequence

, a significant portion of citizens thinks that all our funds should be spent on upgrading hospitals and improving school

infostructures

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due to

the fact that these are priorities for society.

Additionally

, Stadiums are often built to host global sports events like the Olympic games.

For

this

reason, these fancy structures are made bigger than they would be normally necessary.

For example

, some of the fields built for the

last

Football World Cup will soon be demolished because they are no longer needed.

In contrast

, these buildings can have a huge impact on the promotion of

the

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physical activity. Theatres,

on the other hand

, can be fundamental to the culture of the population. To summarize, entertainment complexes are expensive and they are not as important as medical centres

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schools and universities. In my opinion, it's important that the government promotes physical activity and culture by funding sports venues and theatres.

However

, the number of euros spent on these projects should be just a small percentage of that spent on primary needs

such

as healthcare.

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Ensure that each paragraph relates back to the main topic and supports your opinion clearly.

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Your essay has a clear and logical structure. However, consider using more transitional phrases to improve the flow of ideas between paragraphs.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

259 words

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