Some people think that it is better to educate boys and girls in separate schools. Others, however, believe that boys and girls benefit more from attending mix schools. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is a fact that
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the concept of mixed
school
is a controversial subject in which some people opine that having separate
school
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for
both
gender
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is more advantageous but
while
others think the opposite way. In my opinion, I strongly support the mixed
school
system and I will explain
both
views with relevant examples.
To begin
, there are many advantages vested in attending mixed schools.
Firstly
, it generates equality
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the mindset of children.So they have a feeling of social acceptance
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other.
Secondly
,
while
studying with girls,boys can enhance their positive attitude towards the opposite sex.
For example
, the American psychological association point out that, mixed schools cherish more empathy and positive Call existence among
both
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.
Therefore
, in the future when they reach
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adulthood, they can have
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relationship
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with
women
.
Finally
, it mobilizes social solidarity and reduces inequality and
desparity
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disparity
among people.
On the other hand
,in many countries their religious leaders
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the idea of
mixed
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school
system because they are thinking it will against their moral values.
Furthermore
some
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that
women
are only for household work and
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children
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,
while
men are the central power of society.
Consequently
,all these cultural identities increased violence among
women
.To illustrate
this
, the terrorist group
thaliban
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Taliban
attacked Malala Yusaf Khan
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the year 2010 because she continued her studies in Pakistan.
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thaliban
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,
woman
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are not allowed to educate, whoever
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they execute them publicly.So in my view,
both
men and
women
are equal and everyone
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their own opportunity to develop. In conclusion,
women
are an essential part of society and they have their own capability to bring enormous changes in our society.So as
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human being our responsibility to accept everyone regardless of their gender.
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