Some people say history is important subject and other say science and technology.To what extent do agree or disagree

Many argued that history is
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essential subject,
on the other hand
,some say that STEM is.In my opinion,I agree that science and
teachnology
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technology
is the important topic to
studied
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.
To begin
with,Science and technology is an essential
part
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in
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this
modern world.Mobile
phone
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phones
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,
car
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cars
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,
rocketship
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and many more
wolrd
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world
changing innovations required
an
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expertise in
this
field
results
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in massive employment of STEM
worker
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.
On the other hand
,Learning history is likely not
make
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a direct impact
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one's career as
this
is a subject that
studied
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about the past not the
For
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my view,I think both
subject
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is equally important and will benefit a learner.
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