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Because of growing populations, more homes are needed in many countries. Do you think it is better to build houses in existing cities or build new towns in the countryside?

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games
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. I always was a person, who observed
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game
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 several categories for myself. My lovely kind of
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 cutscene. It is a
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 as a movie or serial, has a storyline and you don’t bore to see it even
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 don’t play.
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 comes more
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 especially when there is provides
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players the choice to create the storyline on their own and you can see unexpectable stories and context. And co-op is no less popular
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 the same time
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 complete the
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campaign
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World of tanks, but from my experience,
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 usually plays with interesting obstacles, context and collective brainstorms for
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gameplays
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. It can be plays connected with weapons, killings, murders and cruel combats. There are several kinds of
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game
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. As for me, it’s not
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on
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my morality or sentience, it is just boring.
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play
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computer
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 in future, because it’s not so
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 and
exiting
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 for alone play.
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holydays
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 or vacation with
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. But I’m sure, that it is
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 idea for a party with friends.
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