You recently bought a piece of sports emunrent from an online store. When You first used the piece of sports equipment, you found a problem with it. Write a letter to the manager of the online store. In your letter describe the problem with the piece of sports equipment • • • say what happened because of the problem explain what you would like the company to do.

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Dear Sir, I am John living in Sydney. I am writing to you about the problem regarding the helmet which I bought from your online store. First of all, I purchased a helmet for personal use on 11 March 2023 from the cricket fan store. I ordered online from your site and paid online $75. The reference number is S7437LLX. That helmet is much

loose

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looser

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and

dropped

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drops

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automatically because it does not have a tight grip on the edges. Moving on,

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the loose structure and feeling uncomfortable

while

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it wearing. I was unable to perform best and lost the chance to play at the state level.

This

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is a great loss for me. I

also

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found that it is not the original element of Maxbuzz,despite a copy of

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brand.

Finally

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, I would like to appreciate it if you favour me and refund my money as soon as possible because I am not satisfied with the service provided by your store. If you find any

further

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information please let me know on my email ID is [email protected] I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, John Mith.

parvinderp93Fri Mar 31 2023

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Include specific details such as the date of purchase and the product details for better clarity.

coherence cohesion

Make sure to include a formal greeting and closing to the letter to the store manager.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

191 words

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