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The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows differences in temperature zones between tropical mountains and temperate mountains Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram reveals information about
temperature
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 zones in tropical
mountains
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 and temperate
mountains
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.
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, the tropical part is divided into 6 different zones,
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temperature
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mountains
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 consist of 4 sections. The first stage of the tropical
mountains
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 is a warm zone which is suitable for many tropical crops.
This
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 sector has the smallest height. The second
temperature
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 zone is used for coffee and cocoa plants. It is spread from 500 to 1500 m. The third cool area is possible for grain cultivation at a height between 1500 and 3000 m. Forests are located from 3000 to 4000 metres. The alpine meadows extend up to 4500 metres until permanent snow. The biggest part of
temperature
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mountains
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 is a cool section where grows general cultivation spread from 0 to 5000 metres. The part that limits broad-leaf trees is the forest.
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 it is shown that the snow line is separated into two zones, alpine meadows and
last
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 one a permanent snow area.
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