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Some feel that movies and tv shows are a good way to study history despite their lack of historical accuracy at times. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#feel #movies #tv #study #history #lack #accuracy #times
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There is an argument about
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the efficiency
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 of
movies
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 with historical subjects regarded to their lack of accurate details. I believe that it can be successful in taking the individuals' attention, so to some extent, I completely agree.
History
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 has a significant role in any country's culture,
thus
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 It is truly essential for any community to be informed about
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its
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encestors'
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ancestors
ancestor's
 life
story
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stories
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.
For
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this
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 reason, TV shows or Films especially can catch youngsters' eye which can lead to a desire toward studying
history
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.
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, It is able to give information about the past,
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 as ancient norms and behaviours.
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, when I was
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a student
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, I watched a movie about the ancient city of Troy, It could give me lots of information about
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history
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.
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, in order to study
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apply
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history
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, these methods can be useful.
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movies
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 with
historical
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the historical
a historical
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concept
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concepts
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 are
benefical
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beneficial
, sometimes their lack of historical accuracy can cause issues.
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, It gives false details about the past which can have consequences.
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, I have seen 300, a movie about the war between ancient Greece and
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the Persian
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 empire
that is
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 contain lots of historical
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errors
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.
Secondly
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, sometimes political forces make
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 changes in
history
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 which should be prohibited.
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, on
hisorical
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historical
 subjects more often there is not a clear
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response
for
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to
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 some questions which could raise
in
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apply
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accuracy in
movies
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. In conclusion, folks should be fascinated to study
history
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with
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in
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 several ways
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apply
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one of
them
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which
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 can be TV shows or
movies
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.
While
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movies
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 have
inaccuracy
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an inaccuracy
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 in historical detail, I think
it
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they
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 can be productive in informing people.
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