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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In recent decades,
due to
 globalisation, acquiring a second language and migrating to another country has become a
trend
 among
people
.
Although
people
 suggest that practical and social problems have arisen because of
this
trend
 I partly agree with
this
 view because benefits and drawbacks exist with the
trend
.
This
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this
 issue by using examples to support ideas and demonstrate points.
One
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 the one hand, a lack of understanding
foreigners
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of foreigners
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 who are unable to speak
in
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another language fluently can draw out
racisms
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racism
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, leading them to
having
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social isolation.
In addition
, global problems between nations can result in tensions
in
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 different races.
For instance
, during
Covid-19
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the Covid-19
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 outbreak, Chinese, dwelling in other countries, used to be socially condemned by inhabitants of
the
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specific nations sometimes including violence.
Thus
, it is
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truth
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 that global and
individuals
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 problems can be caused by living in a place where being bilingual is required.
On the other hand
, some
people
 argue that going overseas should be encouraged to acquire opportunities
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 employment.
Furthermore
, it is significantly vital for individuals to attain a wider vision of multicultural aspects through different types of nationality
people
.
For example
, because of excessive
competitions
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competition
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 in South Korea, many
people
 tend to go abroad to find a job and becoming bilingual helps them to secure sustainable employment.
Therefore
,
people
 can benefit from speaking in another language. In conclusion, even though the
trend
 brings some social and practical issues, it undoubtedly has benefits, which individuals can gain by going overseas.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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