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In the future, fewer people will start bands or produce music because they will worry about their music being downloaded from the internet for free. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays,
music
 becomes an integral part of the community, and accessing it is straightforward and free which leads
music
 makers to be anxious about the
future
. I would argue that, though
music
 is freely accessible by any means
however
 the
internet
 does its part to benefit them and will continue in the
future
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss my opinion related to
this
 statement. It cannot be denied that a fraction of
people
downloads
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music
 on the
internet
 freely is outstanding. Albeit, listening to
this
 usually offer poor quality and has various interruption
due to
 adverts. For sure
people
 who are enthusiastic about
music
 will not hesitate to use apps,
such
 as Spotify, Itunes and Alghami. Wherein they can experience high-quality produce
music
 without distractions from advertisements which frequently occur on free downloadable sites. On one hand, the
internet
 paves the way to alleviate the
music
 industry.
Internet
 innovation help musicians and other
people
 in the
music
 industry to gain profits from their efforts in producing
music
.
In addition
, the
internet
 put musicians to fame around the globe because of its accessibility. Since a huge fraction of the population all over the world loves
music
people
 will not be hindered to pay for the use of apps.
Therefore
 it's foreseeable that the sales will remain on top as long as there are
people
 who are into listening
high-quality
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to high-quality
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 production
music
. In conclusion, I disagree with the notion that the
future
 of
music
 will diminish because of
internet
 downloadable free sites.
Nevertheless
, the rise of
internet
 innovation gives a significant impact on the
music
 industries
this
 will continue in the
future
.
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