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Many people are afraid to leave their homes because of their fear of crime. Some people believe that more actions should be taken to prevent crimes, but others feel that little can be done. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is a fact that many
people
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 are afraid of leaving their homes
due to
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 their fear of
crimes
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.
While
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 some
people
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 believe more
actions
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 should be taken to reduce the crime rate, just as many
people
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 are convinced that nothing can be done. In
this
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 essay, I will look into both points of view before presenting my own opinion and drawing a conclusion. On the one hand, it is understandable for some
people
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 to be pessimistic that no measures can make
crimes
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 disappear.
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, the fact that there are still criminals and violent
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 in today’s world can be
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evidence. Sociologically, there cannot be an ideal
society
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 without crime. Because
crimes
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 are born out of the differences amongst individuals where some
people
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 choose the quickest and easiest way they can think of to put a stop to the pain caused by said differences.
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, the gap between the rich and the poor has always existed, which causes a majority of poor
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 to feel inadequate to their richer peers;
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as a result
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, many
people
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 choose
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the easy way to end their poverty, which is stealing from the
people
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 who have what they lack,
instead
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 of putting more effort into making more money.
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, some
people
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 are addicted to committing
crimes
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 despite the knowledge of the consequences they bring. Take drug dealers and drug traffickers as an example, they know very well the death sentence they will face, yet they keep choosing the go down that criminal path, and even find better ways to do so without being caught
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 because drug trafficking brings significantly more income than a nine-to-five job.
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,
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 who are convinced
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 the negative news they see that they might end up being robbed or murdered one day are not without reasons.
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, some
people
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 choose to remain positive that more taken
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 can actually help them feel safer. It is true as well when we consider the growth of our
society
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, thanks to the role of
education
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. In the past, when there was not any rule, we used to be on high alert that someone might steal our food and we would end up starving. But
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 we created the law and educated each other to respect others’ possession.
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, the more educated we become, the better
society
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 develops, and the safer the citizens feel.
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,
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 moral and legal
education
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,
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self-defense
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 is another essential topic that the authorities can provide their citizens with.
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 general
education
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 helps everyone to learn to become a better person,
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self-defense
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 helps each of the individuals in that community to protect themselves from the wrongdoings of others. It is true that our
society
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 has become safer than it was in the past, but we cannot rely on each other’s mercy and good intentions to survive.
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,
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self-defense
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 is one way we can be responsible for our own safety.
In my
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 opinion, I am in support of the statement in
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actions
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 should be taken to prevent
crimes
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. Despite the pessimism surrounding us perpetually, we must take the matter into our own hands and ensure our own security. Because if we are idle in
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 matter, more
crimes
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 will occur and
society
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 will become a terrible place to live. In conclusion, both viewpoints have their own reasons.
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, I support taking more
actions
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, especially investing in moral and
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self-defense
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education
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, in spite of the
crimes
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 that drag down our morale.
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