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The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton, and planned future development of the site.
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The maps illustrate how the industrial
area
 of Norbiton City will be developed in the future.
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, it can be seen there will be extensive development upcoming in regards to
construction
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the construction
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 of shops, a medical centre, a playground,
housings
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housing
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 and a school. First of all, In the present industrial section has various
of
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factories near
roundabout
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the roundabout
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. There is a river on the north side of
factories
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the factories
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.
In addition
,
on
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in
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 the
north
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northern
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area
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 there is
a
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farmland next to the river. There is
also
 a town separated by a wall located on the west side of
industrial
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the industrial
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area
.
On the other hand
, in the future plan roads will be extended which is divided by four directions and all the factories will be transformed into housings. On the
south-west
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southwest
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 of
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the roundabout
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roundabout
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,roundabout
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 there will be shops, which
across
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are across
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 the housing
area
.
Moreover
,
on
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in
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 the
south-east
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southeast
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area
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,area
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 there is a medical centre between the two roads of
south
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the south
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 and east route. There are
also
 a school and a playground near the housing site. River, town and farmland remain
the
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in the
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 same location.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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