Some people say the main way to be happy in life is to have a lot of money. How might having a lot of money can make people happy? What other things in life can make people happy?

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Some individuals claim that financial success is crucial to provide a permanent state of
happiness
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may cause
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for some, a family or art may be
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to acquire a sustainable feeling of being a happy person. What is
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connection between financials and
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feelings
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of
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? First of all, rich
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can satisfy almost all of their material desires without any struggles which
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to their emotional state.
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,
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experience strong positive emotions when buying a car or travelling.
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, spectators tend to associate money with success in some work
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, so
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person
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may receive an additional amount of social recognition and feel proud because of that. All of these emotional states may cause a feeling of
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, there are many other dimensions of life that can make a particular person happy without financial success. Family is the most common example since it is essential for human beings to have a group of
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who can support
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and provide a feeling of security.
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, my wife is always by my side and I know that I can rely on her, so
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knowledge makes me happy. Another activity that
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some
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happy is art. When artists are performing at
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, they completely lose a track of time and experience
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life as it is unfolding to them. At these moments they look totally happy to me. The feeling of
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, being
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on a particular outlook, may appear
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several reasons. Some
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need wealth to experience
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emotional state
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others may find it in their families or in art.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Financial security
  • Basic needs
  • Comfort
  • Luxury
  • Freedom
  • Altruistic
  • Philanthropy
  • Nurturing relationships
  • Fulfillment
  • Sense of accomplishment
  • Physical well-being
  • Spiritual beliefs
  • Community involvement
  • Gratitude
  • Mindfulness
  • Simple pleasures
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