The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart below gives us information about the number of adults participating in different major sports in one area, in 1997 and 2017. The general trend is upward, and the total amount of human beings participating in sports has risen. We can see an increase in tennis, basketball, golf, football and rugby players. The total of football players and rugby in 1997 was a bit more than thirty million, but in 2017 it makes up approximately fifty million.
Moreover
, there is a significant rise in people who play basketball, the growth is about two-point-five times. The number of tennis players has a slight growth by only five thousand. There is
also
an insignificant growth in people who play golf. But at the same time, the total of human beings playing cricket has fallen by twenty thousand, which makes it three times less than it was. And the only stable kind of sport is swimming. It remains the same in 1997 and 2017 In a nutshell, we have
overall
expansion in all kinds of major sports. And the only decrease is in the number of people playing,
while
other fields are growing. Apart from swimming, it stays unchanged.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participation rate
  • increase/decrease in numbers
  • trend
  • decade
  • relatively stable
  • major sports
  • potential reasons
  • contributing factors
  • public interest
  • comparison
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