Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities (for example, helping at home or at work). Others believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy their lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.
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others think that children
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further
.
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children
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For instance
, parents may give a task for their child
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children
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purchase
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purchasing
while
they have some troubles or other work. He will communicate with others and gain experience for his future.
On the other hand
, another group of individuals believe that children
should be given a
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In other words
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successful
in their lives.
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children
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help
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skills
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in making
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To conclude
, extra responsibility may develop confidence in children
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life
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