You want to appear for an interview to an another city by train. The train departed late form the station and you could not reach in time. Write a letter to the railway officer of your city. In your letter : * When you travelled and why the train departed late * What happened as a result * How you feel about the problem

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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letter to express my dissatisfaction
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the punctuality by which the intercity trains run from the city railway station. I am sharing an incident that took place on 10 May, when I was travelling from Ludhiana to Delhi for a job interview. I booked a ticket on Gatiman Express and my train was scheduled to leave the station by 7.30 AM, but it left the platform at 8.37AM.
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of it, I reached Delhi at 2.00PM but the interview timing was 1.45PM and I reported at the venue at 3.00PM. Unfortunately, the managers refused to take my job interview. I was very disappointed because it happened
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the
neglegance
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negligence
of the railway staff. I was very well prepared for that opportunity but everything got in
vein
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. That job was very crucial for me to get because it would have given my career a great start. In the end, I would urge you to kindly take some
disciplainery
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disciplinary
action against the staff, which was on duty that day and please make sure that
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incidents should not happen to anyone else in future. I am looking forward to hearing a positive response from your side. Yours faithfully, Jatinder.
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Try to avoid minor spelling errors such as 'neglegance' which should be 'negligence'. It can help in making a stronger impression overall.
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Make sure to use concise language. For instance, 'in vein' should be corrected to 'in vain'. Minor changes can significantly improve the quality.
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You have clearly covered all the points asked in the task, providing a detailed reason for the delay, its consequence, and your feelings.
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The letter has a logical structure and flows well from one point to the next.
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You've used an appropriate tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for formal communication.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • departure
  • delay
  • train schedule
  • technical issues
  • logistical problems
  • missed appointment
  • financial losses
  • career opportunities
  • frustration
  • disappointment
  • service improvement
  • future occurrences
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