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Some people think that success is the best measure for intelligence, while others think that intelligence can be measured other ways. What is your opinion?

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 is thought of as the best measure of
intelligence
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,
while
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 some
people
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 believe that there are other ways to measure
intelligence
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. From my point of view, intelligent
people
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 show their
success
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. So there is no need for other measuring ways. First of all,
success
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 is directly connected with
people
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. If someone works hard and has some abilities, he/she can reach
success
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.
For example
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, if students want to get a high score on an exam, they need to work and improve themselves.
Moreover
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,
intelligence
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 is something improvable.
This
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 reason shows that
success
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 is a result of a high level of
intelligence
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.
On the other hand
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,
To conclude
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, it is argued by many
people
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 other ways exist to measure
intelligence
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. In my opinion,
success
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 is the most important one to understanding the
intelligence
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 level of someone.
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