Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities (for example, helping at home or at work). Others believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy their lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some individuals think that
children
should have extra
responsibilities
like helping at
work
as well as
at home but others believe that they should be free to enjoy their lives after school. In
this
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will discuss both views in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, kids should have extra
responsibilities
so that they become independent in their life.
For example
, if
children
know how to make food
then
they do not need to depend on others for
foods
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and they can make their own food.
Secondly
,
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the child
a child
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child
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children
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must have extra
responsibilities
because it would be
benefits
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for their future. They learn many things
such
as how to manage
home
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and
work
at the same
time
. In
this
way, they learn how to manage
the
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time
.
On the other hand
, some people believe that
children
should
free
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be free
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after school so that they feel
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and give
time
to their hobbies. When
children
are in school
then
they have a lot of stress
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their
study
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.
That is
why, they do not give extra
work
.
According to
me,
Children
should give extra
responbilities
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responsibilities
because they become independent
as well as
responsible
person
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people
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in their life because of extra
responsiblities
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responsibilities
. In conclusion, some people think that
children
ought
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give extra
work
so that they become independent and extra
work
also
benefit for future. Others believe that they should give free
time
to complete their dreams and hobbies. In my opinion,
Children
should give some extra
responsibilities
also
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extra responsibilities
  • develop skills
  • life lessons
  • work ethic
  • sense of responsibility
  • contribute to
  • family
  • community
  • playtime
  • physical development
  • mental development
  • balance
  • enjoyment
  • guide
  • childhood
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