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Some people believe that children of all ages should have extra responsibilities (for example, helping at home or at work). Others believe that, outside of school, children should be free to enjoy their lives. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some individuals think that
children
 should have extra
responsibilities
 like helping at
work
as well as
 at home but others believe that they should be free to enjoy their lives after school. In
this
 essay,
i
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 will discuss both views in the upcoming paragraphs. On the one hand, kids should have extra
responsibilities
 so that they become independent in their life.
For example
, if
children
 know how to make food
then
 they do not need to depend on others for
foods
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food
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 and they can make their own food.
Secondly
,
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the child
a child
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child
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children
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 must have extra
responsibilities
 because it would be
benefits
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 for their future. They learn many things
such
 as how to manage
home
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 and
work
 at the same
time
. In
this
 way, they learn how to manage
the
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time
.
On the other hand
, some people believe that
children
 should
free
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be free
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 after school so that they feel
relax
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 and give
time
 to their hobbies. When
children
 are in school
then
 they have a lot of stress
of
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 their
study
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.
That is
 why, they do not give extra
work
.
According to
 me,
Children
 should give extra
responbilities
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responsibilities
 because they become independent
as well as
 responsible
person
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people
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 in their life because of extra
responsiblities
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responsibilities
. In conclusion, some people think that
children
ought
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 give extra
work
 so that they become independent and extra
work
also
 benefit for future. Others believe that they should give free
time
 to complete their dreams and hobbies. In my opinion,
Children
 should give some extra
responsibilities
also
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • extra responsibilities
  • develop skills
  • life lessons
  • work ethic
  • sense of responsibility
  • contribute to
  • family
  • community
  • playtime
  • physical development
  • mental development
  • balance
  • enjoyment
  • guide
  • childhood
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