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UNIVERSITY STUDENTS ARE INCREASINGLY STUDYING ABROAD AS PART OF THEIR STUDIES. DO THE ADVANTANGES OF STUDYING ABROAD OUTWEIGH THE DISADVANTAGES?

#university #students #part #studies #advantanges
Some people think that
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overseas countries give
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 level of education so the youth tends to the different state.
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collage
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 and other parts of
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studying
 places tremendously ascend abroad as a part of their education levels. That tendency has a number of benefits
such
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but
also
 has some drawbacks like
culture
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studying
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studying
more
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 famous over the world and the student choose the various place which their site a lot of
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campus
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.
Moreover
, the special area
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own
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indegenious
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indigenous
ingenious
 things like a meal, a
culture
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 gorgeous
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.
Furthermore
,
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people have
relaxible
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relaxable
 feelings during
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travel.
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, currently time every person wants going to journey and
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adolescents have a chance and for the reason, they apply to university. The statistics report shows each year millions of youths
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the
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university. Another example is
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 abroad studying
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a potencial
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potential
potencial
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potential
 source of social activities. Recently,
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plenty of
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 have friends
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various
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 like Europe , North America and
Asian
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Asia
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 so that situation
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them
for
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 social life.
On the other hand
, there are some disadvantages
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another country
such
 as
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most people do not know
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at
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particular
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 area for the reason
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 few accidents.
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, The Journal of Japan illustrates that a few persons
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 by
inhabitats
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inhabitants
 in Japan. Obviously, those
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creating
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 a mental illness but
also
 some physical
problem
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problems
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.
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unpleasent
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unpleasant
 action is cheating because the tourists do not know
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 and
that is
 causing
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 in the state. In conclusion, I would maintain that all
of
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students
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the students
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 have more practical experiences
in
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the
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abroad
so that
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, I hope each
men
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 and women reach the target
on
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 life
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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