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The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Average distance in miles travelled per person per year

The table below gives information about changes in modes of travel in England between 1985 and 2000.Average distance in miles travelled per person per year
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this
 table chart displays the changes in travel style in England between 1985 and 2000.
Overall
, cars, long-
distance
 buses and trains
also
 taxis
further
 other kinds of styles were increased year after year.
while
 walking, bicycle and local bus were decreased.
Furthermore
,In 1985 the average total
distance
 was 4,740
miles
 whilst the
distance
 increased in 2000 to reach 6,475. Looking in more detail, starting with cars, in 1985 was 3199
miles
 and consistently moved up in
distance
 to reach 4806
miles
 in 2000.
while
 local bus begins with high
distance
 which was 429 but
then
 devalued about quarter to reach 274 in 2000.
On the other hand
, Long
distance
 buses slightly increased from 54 in 1985 to 124 in 2000 compared with trains
it
Correct pronoun usage
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 begins with just 289 in 1985 and to rose 366 in 2000.
Fix the agreement mistake
Bicycles
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Bicycle
Add an article
The bicycle
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 had
changes
Change the verb form
changed
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 slightly devalued from 51 in 1985 to 41 in 2000.
However
, taxis
were
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recovered
slighty
Correct your spelling
slightly
 from 13
miles
 in 1985 to reach 42
miles
 in 2000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words distance, miles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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