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The changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in household in one country between 1920 and 2019

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Electricity is been the most important appliance in our day-to-day daily life. Without ,electricity our daily life just gets stopped. In the below diagram, there has been made a comparison between the percentage of households with electrical
appliances
 and the number of hours of housework per week, per household. The comparison has been made between the year 1920-2019 which is 99 years. The below graph shows the usage of
appliances
such
 as washing machines, refrigerators, and vacuum cleaners. In the first ,diagram the working of the washing machine from the year 1920 to 2019 has increased,
whereas
 the usage of the refrigerator has highly increased. The usage of vacuum cleaners has simultaneously increased. Household
appliances
 get into work very often. In the second ,graph it's shown that people spent more hours in the '90s than '20s. People have used more electrical
appliances
 in 1920 and
then
 the use of
appliances
 have been decreased slowly to 10 hours per week in the year 2019.
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