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Advertising influences people to buy things such as clothes and shoes. What are the problems caused by that? What solutions can be given.

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Advertisement, marketing a
product
 via various media, is a main technique to surge the sale of any particular
product
. Marketing definitely motivates
people
 to purchase more
products
.
This
 essay covers issues arising from
advertisements
 in society and possible remedial steps to deal with problems. Fashion
advertisements
 do not only manipulate human mentality but
also
 encourage
people
 to follow the latest dressing trends. The big brands use celebrities, glamorous and successful faces, to motivate their fans to buy fashionable
products
.
Moreover
, today's youth admire celebrities blindly and
therefore
 they end up spending their money without ensuring the quality of
products
. Another problem that false
advertisements
 can create is that the company advertises a
product
 in a way to make
people
 believe that
product
 can increase social and economic status in society. Materialistic
people
 join a
such
 socio-economical race and start working more hours which imbalance their personal life. If their wages can not satisfy their needs,
then
 they can turn to crime. The first and obvious solution is that the government should regulate the content of
advertisements
 by enforcing strict laws which ensure not promotion of fake information and low-quality
products
. The digital advertisement should be censored by the government authorities before releasing on digital platforms which ensures that the information and publishers are authenticated. The second remedy is that citizens should verify the quality of the
product
 and the background of the brand. In conclusion, false and attractive
advertisements
 can create an unnecessary financial burden on individuals.
However
, these issues can be tackled with the
collaboraitve
Correct your spelling
collaborative
 work of the government and citizens.
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