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Advertising influences people to buy things such as clothes and shoes. What are the problems caused by that? What solutions can be given.

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Advertisement, marketing a
product
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 via various media, is a main technique to surge the sale of any particular
product
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. Marketing definitely motivates
people
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 to purchase more
products
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.
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 essay covers issues arising from
advertisements
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 in society and possible remedial steps to deal with problems. Fashion
advertisements
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 do not only manipulate human mentality but
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 encourage
people
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 to follow the latest dressing trends. The big brands use celebrities, glamorous and successful faces, to motivate their fans to buy fashionable
products
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.
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, today's youth admire celebrities blindly and
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 they end up spending their money without ensuring the quality of
products
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. Another problem that false
advertisements
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 can create is that the company advertises a
product
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 in a way to make
people
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 believe that
product
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 can increase social and economic status in society. Materialistic
people
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 join a
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 socio-economical race and start working more hours which imbalance their personal life. If their wages can not satisfy their needs,
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 they can turn to crime. The first and obvious solution is that the government should regulate the content of
advertisements
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 by enforcing strict laws which ensure not promotion of fake information and low-quality
products
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. The digital advertisement should be censored by the government authorities before releasing on digital platforms which ensures that the information and publishers are authenticated. The second remedy is that citizens should verify the quality of the
product
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 and the background of the brand. In conclusion, false and attractive
advertisements
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 can create an unnecessary financial burden on individuals.
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, these issues can be tackled with the
collaboraitve
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collaborative
 work of the government and citizens.
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