In many countries, government spent large sum of money on the arts, and this is supported by some taxpayers as both why. Other, however, think that this money would be better spent on health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In some countries,
government
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the government
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invested remarkable
money
in the arts and
this
action
assisted
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is assisted
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by many
people
who are taxpayers.
On the other hand
, some
people
belive
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believe
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that
this
investment should be directed to
health
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the health
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and
education
sectors. I believe
,
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the latter group of
people
are more rational than others. Spending
money
on
health
and
education
rather than
art
and music will improve
general
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the general
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well-being of society in a long term.
Firstly
,
government
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the government
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must be spent the
money
of citizens on proper areas. There are different sectors that can beneficial for their community
such
as
health
,
education
, real
estates
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estate
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, and
military
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the military
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. Investing
on
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in
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health
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the health
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system can improve
overall
health
and
hapiness
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happiness
among
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in
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society,
however
, only
small
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a small
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group of individuals can
be benefit
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benefit
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from
art
expenses.
Art
serves only
bunch
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a bunch
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of
people
which are highly educated and
represents
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represent
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small percentages of their community.
Governments
should
be
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apply
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focus on
total
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the total
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benefits of their nations. It is true that
art
and
education
is
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are
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related to each other.
Moreover
, these interests have
synergistic
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a synergistic
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effect
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effects
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on pupils.
Nevertheless
,
education
is
priority
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a priority
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compared to
art
for parents and educational professionals. Improved
education
can be beneficial for
pupils
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pupils'
pupil's
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perspective on life and
future
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the future
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, even their
art
skills indirectly.
However
, without developed
education
, pupils would be restricted in different areas
such
as sports, communication, morality, and ethics.
Secondly
,
art
provides unbelievable extravaganzas
on
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in
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people'
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people's
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minds,
although
art
is not prior compared to
education
and
health
sectors. Without concerts or
art
galeries
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galleries
, lots of
people
have
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apply
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lack
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a lack
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of
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experiences
on
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in
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their lives.
For example
, even a concert of one popular classical music orchestra can be
detremential
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detrimental
on
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to
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people
's lives. Many
governments
already know that fact and supported their citizens, especially students, for intellectual activities like that. From my point of view,
governments
should
contunie
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continue
to
spent
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spend
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money
on fine
art
and music but the budget should be restricted for educational facilities and
health
management. In conclusion,
art
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the art
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sector has
large
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a large
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sum of
money
besides
health
and
education
,
also
this
action
supported
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is supported
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by some
tax payers
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taxpayers
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and
governments
as both why. Some
people
against
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are against
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to
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apply
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this
reality and believe that
this
money
would be spent on
health
and
education
. I'm supporting the latter group of citizens briefly.
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