In many countries, government spent large sum of money on the arts, and this is supported by some taxpayers as both why. Other, however, think that this money would be better spent on health and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion.
In some countries,
government
invested remarkable Add an article
the government
money
in the arts and this
action assisted
by many Add a missing verb
is assisted
people
who are taxpayers. On the other hand
, some people
belive
that Correct your spelling
believe
this
investment should be directed to health
and Correct article usage
the health
education
sectors. I believe,
the latter group of Remove the comma
apply
people
are more rational than others. Spending money
on health
and education
rather than art
and music will improve general
well-being of society in a long term.
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the general
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, government
must be spent the Add an article
the government
money
of citizens on proper areas. There are different sectors that can beneficial for their community such
as health
, education
, real estates
, and Fix the agreement mistake
estate
military
. Investing Correct article usage
the military
on
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in
health
system can improve Correct article usage
the health
overall
health
and hapiness
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happiness
among
society, Change preposition
in
however
, only small
group of individuals can Correct article usage
a small
be benefit
from Change the verb form
benefit
art
expenses. Art
serves only bunch
of Correct article usage
a bunch
people
which are highly educated and represents
small percentages of their community. Correct subject-verb agreement
represent
Governments
should be
focus on Unnecessary verb
apply
total
benefits of their nations. It is true that Correct article usage
the total
art
and education
is
related to each other. Change the verb form
are
Moreover
, these interests have synergistic
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a synergistic
effect
on pupils. Fix the agreement mistake
effects
Nevertheless
, education
is priority
compared to Add an article
a priority
art
for parents and educational professionals. Improved education
can be beneficial for pupils
perspective on life and Change noun form
pupils'
pupil's
future
, even their Correct article usage
the future
art
skills indirectly. However
, without developed education
, pupils would be restricted in different areas such
as sports, communication, morality, and ethics.
Secondly
, art
provides unbelievable extravaganzas on
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in
people'
minds, Correct your spelling
people's
although
art
is not prior compared to education
and health
sectors. Without concerts or art
galeries
, lots of Correct your spelling
galleries
people
have
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apply
lack
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a lack
of
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apply
on
their lives. Change preposition
in
For example
, even a concert of one popular classical music orchestra can be detremential
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detrimental
on
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to
people
's lives. Many governments
already know that fact and supported their citizens, especially students, for intellectual activities like that. From my point of view, governments
should contunie
to Correct your spelling
continue
spent
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spend
money
on fine art
and music but the budget should be restricted for educational facilities and health
management.
In conclusion, art
sector has Correct article usage
the art
large
sum of Add an article
a large
money
besides
health
and education
, also
this
action supported
by some Add a missing verb
is supported
tax payers
and Correct your spelling
taxpayers
governments
as both why. Some people
against
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are against
to
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apply
this
reality and believe that this
money
would be spent on health
and education
. I'm supporting the latter group of citizens briefly.Submitted by historicalpen on
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