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These days in some countries an increasing number of young adults are choosing their whole weekends inside homes. Why do you think it is happening ? Is this a positive or negative development?

#countries #adults #weekends #homes #development
Nowadays in some countries
growing
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 number of young adults are selecting their entire
day-off
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day off
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 at
home
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this
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 I will clarify
bad
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the bad
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 and good sides of staying at
home
 at the weekends thoroughly. To commence with in my way of thinking, it is true that many
people
staying
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stay
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 at their house at the weekends
it
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apply
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is a good idea.
Particular
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 reason for the circumstance, when
people
 worked none stop
in
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a week, they will get a kick out of
unwind
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unwinding
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at
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on
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sundays
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Sundays
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. Their brain requires
to
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them to
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 take
a
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rest
at
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for at
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 least one day. Working
in
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for
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 a whole week without stop, it could be
bad
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a bad
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 impact
their
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on their
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 health.
This
 actively demonstrates that
,
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people
choosing
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choose
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 to stay at
home
in
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on
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 a
day-off
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day off
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. Turning
to
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apply
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the drawbacks of staying at
flat
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a flat
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 or an apartment
in
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for
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 an entire day,
it
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apply
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 could bring out
sense
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a sense
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 of
lazyness
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laziness
.
For instance
,
people
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in people
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 who waste their time
with
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apply
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sleeping or lying down
in
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for
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 a full day,
headache
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headaches
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 or some kind of
diseases
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disease
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 could
be appear
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.
Additionally
,
according to
 scientists:
people
 who have a hectic schedule on weekdays and by working endlessly, they got tired,
hence
, they prefer to stay at
home
and
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which
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 can reduce their stress.
To sum
up
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 everything that has been stated so far, nowadays young
people
 prefer to enjoy their weekend in their house rather than going outside because they feel, by doing so they can calm their body.
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