Write a letter of suggestions to the editor about crime safety

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing in response to the article in your magazine

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week. I want to make suggestions about how to improve community safety because no one deserves to live in danger. People have to feel safe about their own lives and

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their families and friends.

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the material things for which these people work so hard during the years. A possible solution is to increase police patrols on the streets around the

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. By doing

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improved police presence will allow faster responses when the crime happens. Another way to solve

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problem is to improve street lighting by putting in more lamps.

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, better visibility at night will make people feel safer when they need to be outside at night to walk their pets . One solution would be to increase the number of CCTV cameras put

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different places.

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, more cameras will deter criminals from committing crimes. In my opinion by doing all of

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and maybe more

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society will live better. When someone feels endangered it is impossible to live a healthy and successful life. In

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the communication between

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disappears and everyone feels strange. Yours faithfully, Viktoria Yordanova

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

6 paragraphs

202 words

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Write a letter of suggestions to the editor about crime safety

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

In some countries, only few young people go to classical music concerts or or play classical music. Why? Should young people be encouraged to attend and learn more?

You have just spent a week with a friend on holiday. When you got home, you realized you had left your wallet there. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: Thank your friend for the holiday Explain that you left your wallet in their house Give them instructions of how to send it back to you

Today many people frequently change their jobs. What problems does it create? How to solve them?

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?