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in some countries, secondary schools provide students with an opportunity to learn skills such as cookimg,basic repairs, draawing and woodwork. what are the advantages and disadvantages of teaching such non academic classes in school

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Today, in some countries,secondary schools provide
students
 with an
opportunity
 to learn skills.
For example
,cooking and woodwork.
This
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learning
such
non academic
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 in
school
. On the one hand,there are several advantages of teaching
such
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non academic
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non-academic
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class
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classes
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 in
school
.
Firstly
,these
classes
 provide skill
is
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that is
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 very important to
students
.
For example
,cooking.When parents do not leave in
a
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 house,
sstudents
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students
 can cook by
therself
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herself
.
Also
, in the
future
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 we need cooking
skill
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.
Secondly
,if
they
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 parents are very busy,parents
is
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are
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 difficult to
teaching
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teach
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 an
opportunity
.So
students
 can get
knowlage
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knowledge
 by
school
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the school
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.
Lastly
,
students
 are very
tiread
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tired
beccause
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because
 basic subjects
is
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are
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 very important so
students
 have to
foucs
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focus
 on
class
.So,
students
 can relax
by
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through
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larning
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learning
opportunity
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opportunities
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becouse
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because
 communicating is
a
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apply
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important in
opportunity
class
.
On the other hand
,there are several disadvantages
of
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to
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 teaching
such
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a such
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non academic
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non-academic
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class
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classes
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 in
school
.
Firstly
,
students
 have to
selfstudy
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self-study
self study
 more because if taking the
opportunity
classes
,basic subjects
classes
is
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decrease
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decreased
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.So
students
 have to study more.
Also
,the likelihood of failing the exam increase because
students
 can not learn
depply
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deeply
than
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and
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 do not have an
opportunity
classes
 in
school
. In conclusion,teaching
such
non academic
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non-academic
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classes
 in
school
 have some advantage.
Such
 as there
classes
 skill is very useful
for
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in
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 our life.
However
 ,there are several disadvantages.
For
example
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students
 can not
learning
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learn
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depply
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deeply
 and the likelihood of failing the exam increase.
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