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in some countries, secondary schools provide students with an opportunity to learn skills such as cookimg,basic repairs, draawing and woodwork. what are the advantages and disadvantages of teaching such non academic classes in school

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Today, in some countries,secondary schools provide
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,cooking and woodwork.
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,these
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students
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herself
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 we need cooking
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,if
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knowledge
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,
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focus
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.So,
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,
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self-study
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.So
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,the likelihood of failing the exam increase because
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deeply
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Such
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 and the likelihood of failing the exam increase.
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