The maps show a beachfront in Australia in 1950 and today

The provided maps illustrate the changing in the beachfront area in Australia between 1950 and today.

Overall

, these sections located near to onshore have significantly developed in terms of facilities, buildings and extending paths. First of all, it can be seen that the street road toward the city in 1950 had a car park destination, but today

this

road has extended through whole facilities to a lighthouse which is in close proximity to the beach.

Furthermore

, the playground area has been varied to be another car park

as well as

street paths access through there.

Subsequently

, there are several modifying facilities on the east and west, it can be apparent that it was unoccupied in these two directions in 1950.

Nevertheless

, people have erected a restaurant and some surf clubs in order to serve in tourism. The swimming pool in the west has been expanded from 25m to 50m and another pool in the east has been unchanged next to the lighthouse remains until now.

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The maps show a beachfront in Australia in 1950 and today

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

It is important for all towns and cities to have large public outdoor places like squares and parks. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Demand for food is increasing worldwide. What are the causes of this topic? What measures can the international community take to meet this demand?

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A long-distance flight consumes as much fuel as a car consumes in several years time, and causes the same amount of pollution as cars. So some people think we should abandon none essential flights and it is more efficient than restricting the car. To what extent do you agree or dis agree?