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It is observed that in many countries not enough students are choosing to study science as a subject. What are the causes? And what will be the effects on society? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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There is no doubt that these days many
students
 do not choose to
study
science
 as a
subject
. The question is why not enough
students
 choose
science
 as a
subject
 to
study
.In
This
 essay, I am going to discuss the
causes
 of
this
 matter.
Moreover
, it has an effect on the community. In terms of the
causes
,
students
 do not choose to
study
science
due to
 it is difficulties as a main
subject
 , requiring a high grade
in other words
, more effort into studying to earn a high score.
furthermore
, Long time courses, a lot of
students
 are rushing for their future. For illustration, I chose to
study
 health
science
 for 6 years, since the health industry is developing fast, by the time I graduated a lot of things had changed since my first year and that affected me as a healthcare practitioner, in the other hand, my sister chose to
study
 human resource took her 3 years the advantage is there is nothing changed since she chose the
subject
.
However
, we can not overlook the influence on the community regarding
this
 topic, I believe that if
students
 continue to not choose
science
 as a
subject
 and we end up with low
science
 partitioners, the labour market demands are not gonna be filled. In conclusion, it is evident the
causes
 that prevent student to not choosing to
study
science
 as a
subject
, and their effects on the community. universities must ensure steps are taken to know the root
causes
 of
this
 observation, and prevent
this
 phenomenon from deteriorating future.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • STEM (Science, Technology, Engineering, Math)
  • Perception of difficulty
  • Early exposure
  • Engaging experiences
  • Career opportunities
  • Practical applications
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural norms
  • Critical fields
  • Innovation
  • Economic development
  • Global competitiveness
  • Public health
  • Environmental issues
  • Scientific progress
  • Educational standards
  • Biodiversity loss
  • Healthcare services
  • Medical research
  • Job prospects
  • Research and technology
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