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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situaltion?

#countries #home #people #be #case #situaltion
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countries
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some countries
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, having
own
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their own
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 home
instead
 than renting one is much crucial for people. I think
this
 is a positive example to have your own asset. From my point of view, it is necessary to have your own property or house since
this
 is one of our major needs in our lives;
such
 as having what you called your own investment is the safest feeling to become more comfortable in everyday
lives
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life
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, saving funds that you can use for the near future
for example
 when facing
difficulty
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difficult
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 times; some of the family
member
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members
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 is sick and needs to undergo a major procedure.
Moreover
, you don't need to borrow
to
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from
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 someone and face
the
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apply
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growing debt.
In addition
, the reasons why some
nation
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nations
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are
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is
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 choose
renting
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to rent
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 a house
instead
buying
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of buying
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own
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their own
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 house because they
are not have
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do not have
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 enough money and basically opted to purchase some other things like
foods
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food
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,material things, educational and health issues especially, there are not capable to think or decide what is more important to do if they have much money. In conclusion, I totally agree having your own home is the best decision that you ever had and not just working in
everyday
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every day
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 to provide
basic
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for basic
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 needs.
As a result
, making money is not enough to buy things
but
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apply
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you
must
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just
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 need to know, how is the proper way to manage your funds
for
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in
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 difficult times and
who
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whom
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 the right person to guide you
for
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in
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this
 situation.
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