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Some people say that children should start learning a foreign language when they are 7 years old, but other believe that they should start when they are 18 years old. discuss both views and write your own opinion.

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I partially agree with the statement that children should start learning another
language
 before they turn 18. I believe that the earlier you start, the chances to be better at mastering the
language
 is higher.
However
, I can't fully support
this
 statement since all or nothing impression it gives.
In contrast
, I do believe that
kids
 should focus more on developing their early-stage
skills
 rather than trying to learn a foreign
language
. Both sides have their own merits, which will be outlined below. On the one hand, the early stage of education is crucial for children. If they get to explore and be exposed to other than their mother
language
 may have a better opportunity to be as good as a native speaker of that
language
.
For example
, most parents in Asia teach the English
language
 to their
kids
 since they're a toddler.
In addition
,
this
 can help them to thrive in campus admission programs since admission mostly requires English
language
 assessment scores.
On the other hand
, I believe that it is better for them to learn after the age of 7 years old. In the very early stages of their lives,
kids
 should focus on exploring and developing more early-stage
skills
. These
skills
 include social
skills
, emotional intelligence, critical thinking and problem-solving. Most of these require
language
 but not to the extent of understanding another
language
.
Additionally
, teenagers might already know themselves well to navigate what subject or
language
 they are interested in, so it is way better for them to learn a new
language
. In conclusion, even though both sides have
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, it is better for
kids
 to focus on their early-stage
skills
 development. These
skills
 are very crucial for them to be able to function well in society.
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