While many people go to university for academic study, more people should be encouraged to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers such as electricians and plumbers. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays many
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prefer to go to university to get an academic education ,
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some
people
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argue that there should be more
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who are willing to do vocational training because there is a lack of qualified workers
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as electricians and plumbers. I partially agree with
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argument and I will explain why in
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essay. First and foremost, there is a huge number of unemployed
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with undergraduate or postgraduate degrees, since most senior-year
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choose popular majors like law or business without thinking about demand in the workforce.
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, only one out of every five graduated
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of law schools is employed within one year in Mongolia.
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, it is becoming common for
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to do a job which they did not study for.
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, schools should provide events which are helpful for
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to choose their future majors in collaboration with universities and specific training courses.
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,
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can visit the vocational training courses with their teachers to find the courses which suit their interests.
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, it is good for the country as long as there are higher educated
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.
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, specific qualifications like plumbing or mechanizing are essential for our society. In conclusion, a lot of
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are struggling to find a job or they just work in someplace which is not related to their major.
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, there is a great demand for a workforce which requires definite qualifications.
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, it would be beneficial for both sides, if more
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choose to acquire skills which are fundamental to everyone's life.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • skilled workers
  • vocational training
  • academic study
  • qualified
  • electricians
  • plumbers
  • technicians
  • hands-on experience
  • job market
  • infrastructure
  • economy
  • unemployment rates
  • consumer spending
  • educational paths
  • job satisfaction
  • societal resilience
  • versatile workforce
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