Nowadays many people choose to be self employed, rather than to work for a company or oragnisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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Presently, working for one's own interests seem to have a strong hold on people's mind rather than that of an organisation or a company. The deep reason for that can hold in our human's core desire of having freedom. In
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the disadvantages of it will be listed. We humans as a species crave the feeling of unboundedness in our
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environment and the reason for it can be that it can lead to the feelings of
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being in more control and that can lead to
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sense of deep
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restricts that and lays the path on which you have to walk and it can lead to the end where one doesn't feel that looseness. More and more individuals nowadays feel that lack of creativity and satisfaction
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choice. Quitting their job seems a great option for them which can lead to them gaining that edge
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they should have.
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disadvantages and the population who marks on
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the pull of that to be our own boss is so strong that sometimes people underestimate the things that they will have to face and just their mere confidence cannot save them from the problems that will crop up. There are lots of cases where
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one had great stability in their
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and took that shot and failed disastrously. Concluding,
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that to be your own master of the
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the street to reach and hold
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filled with big holes which can break someone's back if not proper measures are taken.
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