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The charts show the qualities employers and employees think are important in job seekers.

The charts show the qualities employers and employees think are important in job seekers.
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The first pie chart indicates the percentage of the most important qualities that employees thought about in
interms
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terms
in terms
 of five categories. The second bar chart reveals the number of employers mentioned
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 in terms of ten aspects.
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,
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 the least of job applicants
reagarded
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regarded
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whereas
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, the figure for education degrees was at
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 peak. It
also
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 can be seen that the
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ability of organisation was the most preferred for
emoployers
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employers
employees
in contrast
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 to the innovative, was the lowest opted quality. Looking at the first graph, the proportion of education was the highest, at
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 39%, which was higher than the references, almost rising by 35%. The figures for technical skills and work experience shared a similar number of 24% and 26% respectively. Turning to the second table, the organised ability was mentioned
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100
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according to
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 the hirers. Followed by
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communication and
motivated
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 skills, which accounted for over 60
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, only under 40
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 of innovative skill was mentioned. The other types
were remained
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a
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stable range from 40 to 60
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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