In most countries, with the widespread use of the Internet, people have more freedom to choose to work and study at home instead of traveling to work or college. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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controversial perspective heating
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over how the internet affects the way people choose to study and work.In my point of view,working at home has more advantages than disadvantages. Without a shadow of a doubt,working from home will help workers save time and money on commuting from home to work.With that,they can spend that time on family or personal hobbies.
Moreover
, they can stretch or do some exercises as a break to boost their mental process,
whereas
, when they are in the office they can not do all
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.internet
also
help
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people find suitable jobs from all over the world.
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,there are many
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in Viet Nam choose to import products from
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the ecommerce
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ecommerce
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e-commerce
level
such
as Amazon,
alibaba
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and so on for sale at
high
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price
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in
country
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.
Hence
,Remote working has many benefits.
On the other hand
,the primary drawback of home-based online stuff and education is dealing with disturbance.
This
interference can be
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network
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lost in some cases or is an unnecessary distraction like television shows or video games.
Therefore
,
such
things can interrupt the concentration on the meeting or the lesson and affect their productivity.
Thus
,
although
working remotely has many benefits, it
also
comes with risks. In conclusion, in a considerable number of nations, many workers get their job done from their own private
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and study online
due to
the technological advancement in the internet.I believe that there are more advantages than disadvantages.
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