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The pie chart illustrates several destinations of anthropology alumni from one university after they finished their bachelor degree and the table gives information on the payment of the anthropology graduates after working for 5 years.

The pie chart illustrates several destinations of anthropology alumni from one university after they finished their bachelor degree and the table gives information on the payment of the anthropology graduates after working for 5 years.
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The Illustrated charts depict the
graduates
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 of Anthropology from a particular university after completing their undergraduate degree course and the income of Anthropologists in their professions after five years of working. In General,
it is clear that
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 anthropology alumni who
work
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 full-time share the biggest proportion and those who
work
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 in the government sector obtain the biggest salary. It is apparent that 52% of anthropology
graduates
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work
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 full-time
while
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 15% of them do part-time
work
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.
Then
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, 5% of
graduates
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 prefer to
work
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 part-time
while
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 doing a postgrad study. It can be seen that 8% of
graduates
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 choose to be full-time postgrad students. At the moment, 12% of them remain unemployed. Meanwhile, it shows that 50% of
graduates
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 who
work
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 in the government sector obtain $100.000+
as well as
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 40%
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graduates
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of graduates
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 who
work
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 as freelance consultants and 30%
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graduates
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of graduates
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 who
work
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 in private companies. Those who get paid $25.000 – 49.999
share
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shares
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 the least proportion in three types of employment, 5%, 5% and 10% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words graduates, work with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • pie chart
  • bachelor's degree
  • anthropology alumni
  • employment sectors
  • salary ranges
  • academic roles
  • field research
  • public sector
  • non-profit organizations
  • private sector jobs
  • continuing education
  • job market trends
  • financial prospects
  • career progression
  • economic context
  • geographic location
  • cost of living
  • salary increases
  • experience
  • earning potential
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