Research into new types of medicine is essential to improve health and deal with disease. Who do you think should fund this research- private companies, individuals, or governments?

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a positive impact on healthcare in improving health and dealing with diseases. That brings us to think about who should fund
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kind of research- a private company, an individual or the
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? I would argue that conducting medical research is enormously expensive, time-consuming and involves tremendous effort and patience
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secured funding is crucial.
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, as we know it,
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money
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for medical are limited and
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resources
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the
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taxes
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of wealthy
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individuals
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or companies, making them financially incapable of attending the long-term
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.
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, there are those who can afford
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funding and are well-established in
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type of business, like Elon Musk,
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, and Pfizer, since they have all the means and are well-versed in the medical research
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. Albeit, the
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medication and medical innovation will be pricey for those in the marginalised community.
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, I believed that
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if the
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policies
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drug
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prices in the market,
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make a difference.
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would allow the
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to interfere with their pricing if it is unreasonably high. In the Philippines,
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, it's been a contention for a
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about the high-price
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in the market,
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of the officials in the
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the policy was pushed through
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in the approval of the bill that mandated private companies or
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own
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pharmaceutical
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companies
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to reduce the
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price in the market. In conclusion, I would argue that it should be done by private companies or individuals who are capable to do
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and expensive research
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role
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the
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plays a vital
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in creating policies that intervene in the reduction of
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pricing, as
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benefit
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many people
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all
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sectors
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • funding
  • research and development
  • private sector
  • public health
  • innovations
  • equitable access
  • breakthroughs
  • crowdfunding
  • collaborative approach
  • healthcare advancements
  • niche areas
  • health improvements
  • international partnerships
  • developing countries
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