Somenpwople believe that there should be fixed punishment for every individual crime committed .others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for commiting it ,should be taken in to consideration.

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individual evil should be fixedly punished or not is still considered controversial. Several public perceived that they must be taken to jail for a fixed term, yet others said contrarily. Here I will discuss both views. The proponents of

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argument, people agreed that either individuals or communal, have to have the same right to get the same punishment.

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ensure that the judge

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more transparent in giving the decision.

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individual violation.

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affects an argument that the crime should not be punished in a fixed way. It must be dependent on the context where and how the wrongdoing is done.

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has its own opinion regarding fairness. They posit that it's unfair if

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with different reasoning and context are being jailed with the same law.

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, it seems that being punished in a fixed term would be fairer by some

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, and it could ensure the judge's fairness.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

301 words

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Somenpwople believe that there should be fixed punishment for every individual crime committed .others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for commiting it ,should be taken in to consideration.

Include an introduction and conclusion

ome people think that individuals today are more dependent on each other. Others believe people have become more independent. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Write a letter to your colleagues. In your letter • remind your colleagues what the special occasion you were celebrating was • thank them for the card and gift • explain why you like the gift and how you will use it

You saw an advert in the newspaper asking for volunteers to help run a charity event. Write a letter of application to the organizers. In your letter: -explain why you are interested in helping -Give details suitable past experience -suggest ways you might help with the event.

Because of the negative effects on health of an inactive lifestyle, all university students and school children should be forced to do sports activities at least 3 times per week. Do you agree?

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people make? Has this been a positive or negative development?