Somenpwople believe that there should be fixed punishment for every individual crime committed .others, however, argue that the circumstances of an individual crime and the motivation for commiting it ,should be taken in to consideration.

The issue of whether
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individual evil should be fixedly punished or not is still considered controversial. Several public perceived that they must be taken to jail for a fixed term, yet others said contrarily. Here I will discuss both views. The proponents of
this
view argue that based on the theory of freedom and fairness, every person has the same right in front of the law, including a right to have the same treatment in terms of punishment. Based on
this
argument, people agreed that either individuals or communal, have to have the same right to get the same punishment.
In other words
, it would be unfair if a similar mistake were given different punishment.
In addition
, a fixed term would be more likely
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ensure that the judge
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more transparent in giving the decision.
On the contrary
, the opponents said that there is various different reason for
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individual violation.
For example
, some individual did their crime
due to
the forcing condition which lead them to do so. Others had their own reasons
such
as their intention to do so, or they are enforced by
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.
This
affects an argument that the crime should not be punished in a fixed way. It must be dependent on the context where and how the wrongdoing is done.
Moreover
,
this
view
also
has its own opinion regarding fairness. They posit that it's unfair if
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with different reasoning and context are being jailed with the same law.
Accordingly
, it seems that being punished in a fixed term would be fairer by some
community
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, and it could ensure the judge's fairness.
However
, it is true that sometimes individuals have different reasons and contexts for why they did
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such
crimes,
therefore
, being jailed with the same terms is not fair for some
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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