You are going to work in another city for a year. A friend who lives there offered to help you find a place to live. Write a letter to your friend:  Express your gratitude to him/her  Describe the area that you want to live in  Explain what type of accommodation you are looking for

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Hello Aman, Hope you are doing well. I am really pleased to let you know that I got a job in Amritsar, Punjab. I am moving to Amritsar next year. I will spend at least one year teaching there and could you help me

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a suitable place to live. I want to live near the golden temple so that I can go to Golden Temple daily and pray to God. One more thing,

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area is near to my work

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so that I can easily go to duty and come back on time. There

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a lot of places to

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and my family

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come with me for a short time.

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why, I am looking for

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apartment where we can enjoy

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well and can live

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3 January so please find

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accommodation before

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one. I am very happy to see you. Thank you! your friend, Ramn

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

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Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

158 words

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You are going to work in another city for a year. A friend who lives there offered to help you find a place to live. Write a letter to your friend:  Express your gratitude to him/her  Describe the area that you want to live in  Explain what type of accommodation you are looking for

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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The crime rate nowadays is decreasing compared to the past due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime. Do you agree or disagree?

Today, many people do not know their neighbours in large cities. What problem does this cause? What can be done about this?

Many TV advertisements are aimed at children. What are the effects? Should TV advertisements be controlled?

In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?