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The media should limit how much bad news they report because it discourage people from doing activitis which usually involve very little risk To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#media #limit #news #report #people #activitis #risk
Mass media needs to control the quantity of unsatisfactory
information
 they portray since it
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 individuals from performing activities that have minimal risk.
This
 essay totally agrees with
this
 statement. I believe that discouraging
information
effects
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on
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human performance, even if,
this
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 exercises are not dangerous. Publishing should restrict the number of unsetting data they publish. First of all, unpleasant
information
effects
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 our mental health.
While
 reading all
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 things subconsciously we
remerber
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remember
 everything.
Then
 without even knowing
it
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 we will fear
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everything around us.
For example
, when mass media showed
the
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information
of
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 people that had an accident during climbing mountains most of the local people
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was
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 afraid to go there.
This
 is how bad
information
 work. It discourages people
form
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 doing simple things. Portraying good reports will only cheer individuals to do something. It is
scientificly
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scientifically
 proven that positive
information
 makes our well-being only better. It encourages us to perform at higher results. To illustrate, when
whole
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 situation
this
coronovirus
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coronavirus
 became better and mass media started
talkeing
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talking
 about that
peeople
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people
 around the world started doing something without being scared of getting sick or even worse. In conclusion, I want to
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say
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 that
newpapres
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newspapers
, influencers and
other
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others
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 should
contol
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control
 the amount of upsetting data they release.
Furthermore
, they need to
encrease
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increase
 the quantity of good news they portray. Mankind does not want
ot
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to
 scared of doing
simply
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 activities.
Thus
, they need to reconsider their priorities.
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