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Some children spend hours every day on their smartphones.why is this the case ? Do you think this is a positive or negative trend?

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The advent of smartphones has caused so many problems in society. Some argue that youngsters these days spend a lot of
time
 in front of smartphones for different purposes.
This
 essay will discuss the reasons behind
this
 situation and
show
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how
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is
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 it a positive or negative development. There are several reasons why most
teenager
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teenagers
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spend
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 a lot of
time
 on
the
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smart devices.
Firstly
, addiction to a certain application can be a major cause that gravitates scholars to use smart gadgets over
time
 . It is obvious that most software today contains so
many
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 amusing
contents
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 that
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 any aged grouped people.
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,
in
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some games like pubg includes some many violence like shooting and explosion which creates excitement in individuals.
As a result
, it
force
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 youngsters to use it often.
In addition
 ,
lack
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 of parental guidance can
also
 be a reason for
this
 development. Today, most parents are really busy in their life because of their busy
schedule
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.
Therefore
, they do not have the
time
 to guide their children about the after effect of
smartphones
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as a
result
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 children become less
concern
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 about
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the overusage
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overusage
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over usage
overuse
 of smart gadgets
,
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and their consequences.
However
, I assume that it has a negative of youth because of health problems
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. Caused by overage
smart phones
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smartphones
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. As we know that most individuals used their smart devices even during
their
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 night
time
 , and
as a
result
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 it cause eye issues in children , the blue light that emits from
the
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smart gadgets can cause issues to
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eye
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 like eye strain and blindness.
Moreover
, it is easy for teenagers today to fall
the
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 traps set by the intruders in
virtual
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the virtual
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 world. It is obvious that there are so many fake sites
in
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 social media platforms, which is created by spammers for deceiving individuals for personal growth, and some teen even
fall
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 for the trap . Thereby
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 their entire lives .
For instance
, we can see that
ther
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there
 are so many free
money making
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 applications made by hackers to fool people so that they can use them for their personal
benefits
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • screen time
  • digital devices
  • smartphone addiction
  • online interactions
  • developmental impact
  • physical health
  • mental well-being
  • academic performance
  • parental supervision
  • proliferation of apps
  • engaging content
  • excessive use
  • sedentary lifestyle
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