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2-Some people think that zoos are cruel and all the zoos should be closed. However, others think that zoos are useful to protect rare animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Zoos
 have a critical role in keeping animal species. Some proponents vote for saving
animals
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animals'
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 lives ,
whereas
 opponents have an opposite point of view. In my humble opinion,
animals
 have the right to be set free rather than
imprisoning
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 them.
Firstly
, animal breeders are aggressive with
animals
.
In other words
,
animals
 are exposed to
a
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certain violence
due to
 their limited knowledge about the way of taming
animals
.
Furthermore
, animal
lose
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 their instinct for hunting and adapting the
wild life
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wildlife
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.
For example
, lions and tigers which return back to the wild forest,
they
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couldn't catch their prey spontaneously,
besides
it
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 may die
due to
 their inability to keep up with climate changes and tough
enviromental
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environmental
 issues. what can be said is that
animal's
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 nature
were
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 distorted by human beings.
On the other hand
,
zoos
 could be a good solution for endangered
animals
 and rare
animals
.
In other words
, when the
animals
 have been hunted by the hunting organization, it will lead to
imbalance
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 among different kinds of
animals
 in our ecosystem.
For instance
, pandas were killed by establishments because they
keen
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 on profitable projects
such
 as selling the skins of these
animals
. On top of that, establishing
zoos
open
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opens
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 up many job
opportinutes
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opportunities
 for the local residents. These examples show
that
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the
ilegal
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illegal
 activities of certain
foundtions
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foundations
 and
it's
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their
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 merit in increasing the number of employed youths. In conclusion,
after
this
 essay has shown the advantages and disadvantages of
zoos
, it can be said that lawmakers should impose a law to prevent the extinction of
the
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rare
animals
. I think that the government should punish the outlaws who offend
animals
.
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