The pie chart illustrates the proportion of persons who are captured and the bar chart illustrates the reason why they are captured in the five years ending 1994 .

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of persons who are captured and the bar chart illustrates the reason why they are captured in the five years ending 1994

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The two diagrams provide data on the percentage of arrested people and the third chart gives information about their motivation in the five years ending 1994.
It is clear that
the proportion of captured men accounted for almost
one third
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of the total and the figure for women who were arrested was rather lower and made up only about
one tenth
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. Probing
further
, getting drunk in public is the most popular reason to be arrested for both men and women (about 30% and 37% respectively).
However
, men are
also
usually captured for drunk driving, the percentage accounted for approximately
one fourth
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,
when
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assault
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the assault
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is a quite popular reason for women (almost 20%). About 5% of both groups gave no answer
for
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the question about their crime motivation.
Overall
, male persons are captured 3 times more than females and the most popular reason for recent arrests is public drinking.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Incarceration
  • Proportion
  • Pie chart
  • Bar chart
  • Demographic data
  • Socioeconomic factors
  • Correctional facilities
  • Legislation
  • Criminal justice system
  • Crime rate
  • Felony
  • Misdemeanor
  • Recidivism
  • Deterrence
  • Rehabilitation
  • Policy makers
  • Law enforcement agencies
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