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Write an essay discussing your opinion about transnationalism

The best way to look at the migrant experience which can help both
migrants
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 and local communities is transnationalism.
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, migrant organisations promote the migrant country within the host society.
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, the natives can learn a lot about a country
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 a migrant coming from there.
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 way, the locals experience positive cultural exchange, which can give them general knowledge.
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, technology and the internet mostly help
migrants
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 keep links with their home country and families.
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 way,it is quick and easy to communicate with relatives and keep up with national TV, films and news.
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, everyone should be able to access the media and know their loved ones are okay.
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, transnationalism can lead to
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the isolation
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 of
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 within host countries.
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,
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, transnational communities participate fully in the host society.
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 is why in most big cities and capitals there are different
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 with
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. All things considered, transnationalism is one step for the world to become modern. By people going away from their home countries, they are gaining knowledge and are becoming more independent.

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