The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

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The given bar chart depicts the disproportion of cell

phones

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and landlines per hundred

people

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in seven different countries.

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, as can be seen from the chart

that

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apply

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the number of

people

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using mobiles steadily increases from Canada to Italy. ,

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However

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the amount of

landline

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users

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fluctuates. ,

also

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we can see that Italy has the highest number of cell phone

users

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although

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also

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has the lowest

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landline

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number of landline

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users

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. Speaking of the first three countries Canada,Us and Germany regarding mobile

users

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they’re right at around 36,58,71 respectively. both Canadian and US folk have a

tendance

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tendency

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to use landlines more than cell

phones

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.Whilst Germany is the complete opposite the window between mobile

users

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and

landline

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users

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is 10

phones

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per hundred

people

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for mobile

users

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. On the other, hand the rest four countries Denmark, the UK,Sweden and Italy prefer the usage of mobile

phones

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except for Denmark which has approximately 87

phones

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per hundred

people

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. ,

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apply

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moreover

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it is the highest country regarding

landline

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users

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. In ,comparison Italy's

landline

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users

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student 45 despite that it still exceeds the 10 mark in mobile

users

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by around seven

phones

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per hundred

people

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Contractions: Don't use contractions.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words phones, people, landline, users with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

189 words

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The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

Prison is the common way in most countries to solve the problem of crime. However, a more effective solution is to provide people a better education. Do you agree or disagree?

These days, the number of children who are overweight has increased. What are the causes? What are the solutions?

Some people believe that children’s leisure activities must be educational, otherwise they are a complete waste of time. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your experience.

In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their children to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life.To what extend do you agree?