The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.

The chart shows the number of mobile phones and landlines per 100 people in selected countries. 

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information given.
The given bar chart depicts the disproportion of cell
phones
and landlines per hundred
people
in seven different countries.
Overall
, as can be seen from the chart
that
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the number of
people
using mobiles steadily increases from Canada to Italy. ,
However
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,However
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the amount of
landline
users
fluctuates. ,
also
we can see that Italy has the highest number of cell phone
users
although
it
also
has the lowest
landline
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number of landline
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users
. Speaking of the first three countries Canada,Us and Germany regarding mobile
users
they’re right at around 36,58,71 respectively. both Canadian and US folk have a
tendance
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tendency
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to use landlines more than cell
phones
.Whilst Germany is the complete opposite the window between mobile
users
and
landline
users
is 10
phones
per hundred
people
for mobile
users
. On the other, hand the rest four countries Denmark, the UK,Sweden and Italy prefer the usage of mobile
phones
except for Denmark which has approximately 87
phones
per hundred
people
. ,
,
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moreover
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,moreover
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it is the highest country regarding
landline
users
. In ,comparison Italy's
landline
is
users
student 45 despite that it still exceeds the 10 mark in mobile
users
by around seven
phones
per hundred
people
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Contractions: Don't use contractions.
Vocabulary: Replace the words phones, people, landline, users with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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